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Courtesan - Class Mod
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lys_xen 24 Jun, 2017 @ 2:01pm
Possible grammar changes for the Courtesan
@Actionjack
First, I want to say that I love the Courtesan mod. After buying the newest DLC (Crimson Courts) I wanted to give some of the mods a try, and yours was the first.

However, if you don't mind, I might make some suggestions. Not game balance or anything, but more in lines of grammar.

In the description from the Guild:
For example, in the Guild, you have this:
Original:
She walks the nigh street, like a saint, seeking not to comfort but to comfort other.

You might wish to go with:
She walks the night streets, like a saint, seeking for comfort, but to comfort others.

Original:
While her motive, for that lust of shimmering gold are simple; the skills of her trades are not.

Suggestion:
While her motive, the lust of shimmering gold, is simple; the skills of her trade are not.

Original:
Courtesan offers a great support and healing, both for mind and body.

Suggestion:
Courtesan offers great support and healing for both mind and body.

Original:
With her good look, she is also skillful in distracting and debuffing her enemies.

Suggestion:
With her good looks, she is skill in distracting and debuffing her enemies.

Original:
The girl also knows how to take care of her own,

Suggestion:
Maybe change 'The girl' to 'This girl'

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lys_xen 24 Jun, 2017 @ 2:05pm 
In the Survivalist description:

Original:
As of her profession, she is a mistress of nights camping.

Suggestion:
As per her profession, she is a mistress of the night even when camping.

Original:
From the nimble dexterity of three fingers, to the creative use of a sword halt, her ways of stress relieving knows no bounds, as long as you can afford it.

Suggestion:
From the nimble dexterity of three fingers to the creative use of a sword halt, her ways of relieving strees knows no bounds--as long as you can afford it.
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lys_xen 24 Jun, 2017 @ 2:15pm 
In the Blacksmith:

Original:
Her well-endowed body wrapped tightly in some skimpy cloth the can barely be call a dress.

Suggestion:
Her well-endowed body wrapped tightly in some skimpy cloth that can barely be called a dress.

Original:
On her face, she wears a thick layer of makeup that masked her real age.

Suggestion:
On her face, she wears a thick layer of makeup that masks her real age.

Original:
Her outfit is not very well fitted for exploring the depth of a dark dungeon; only fitting to luring the dark depth imagination of men and what they would like to do to her.

Suggestion:
Her outfit is not very well suited for exploring the depths of a dark dungeon, but luring the dark depths of imagination of men and what they would like to do to her.

Aside:
*grins* I don't know, I could see my Vestal also wanting to spend time with her.
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Exodysseus 1 Jul, 2018 @ 10:28pm 
"She walks the night streets, like a saint, seeking for comfort, but to comfort others."
This is wrong, it should be.
"She walks the night streets, like a saint, seeking not for comfort, but to comfort others."
Alternatively,
"She works the night, offering comfort to others, though is no saint."
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