Diposting pertama kali oleh nwk.Sabrini Fur:

Yeah... I was gonna critique it, but you're complaining about something that's literally half a year old, and WAS replied to.

My critique for Mrok boils down to this: It's a tad OP, with all those bonuses and relatively high chances for effects to proc.

It was replied to once and a half :D also I edited it a few times later on so look at the later entries. there more balanced after i made revisions. Currently working on a new hero...

Yes, but see, here's the thing:

Your whining about you not getting anyone to critique your half a year old post has now just hidden my current and challenge-relevant post behind a forum page. You have now made it so that someone who actually deserves a current critique will now potentially not get one.

I'm glad you're working on a new hero, but next time, try not to whine and ruin someone else's experience.

Tunneler:
Role: Support/Disabler
Primary Attribute: Intelligence
Lore: eh I can't think up of anything... will do it later.
Attack Range: 600

1st Skill:

Burrow Strike: Tunneler rapidly descends underground and then appears next to target enemy dealing damage and stunning after 2 seconds. Tunneler is invulnerable and magic immune during duration.
Damage Type: Magical
Pierces Spell Immunity:No
Damage: 150/175/200/225
Stun Duration: 1/1.25/1.5/1.75
CD:10

2nd Skill:

Tremor: Causes tremors on the given area. Deals damage and mini stuns over time.

Duration: 5
Damage: 30/40/50/60
Damage Type: Pure
Mini Stun Duration:.2/.3/.4/.5
Intervals:1
Pierces Spell Immunity :Yes
CD:15

3rd Skill:

Tunnel Network: Tunneler can make a series of tunnels which he and his allies can use to move across vast areas in a short amount of time. Tunnel Entrances are invisible.

Time to make a single tunnel entrance: 10 seconds
Tunnel Entrance Hp: 500
Max Amount of tunnel entrances:3/4/5/6
Travel Speed: 600/1000/1400/1800
Bonus Mana Regen while Travelling :5/10/15/20
Bonus HP regen while travelling: 10/20/30/40
CD: 20 seconds

Ultimate!:

Corrosive Blast: Unleashes a massive acidic blast that deals massive damage and reduces armor.

Damage type: Pure
Damage: 300/400/500
Pierces Spell Immunity Yes
Armor Reduction: 25%/30%/35%
Scepter Armor Reduction: 50%
CD:80/70/60
Scepter CD: 35

Diposting pertama kali oleh Bazookagofer:

Tunneler:
Role: Support/Disabler
Primary Attribute: Intelligence
Lore: eh I can't think up of anything... will do it later.
Attack Range: 600

W - what's the radius?
E - is this channeled? how many max tunnels?
R - the Scepter upgrade is a bit underwhelming....

Diposting pertama kali oleh achus93:

Diposting pertama kali oleh Bazookagofer:

Tunneler:
Role: Support/Disabler
Primary Attribute: Intelligence
Lore: eh I can't think up of anything... will do it later.
Attack Range: 600

W - what's the radius?
E - is this channeled? how many max tunnels?
R - the Scepter upgrade is a bit underwhelming....

W-hmm lets say 300-500
E- Channeled. 6 tunnel entrances that are all interconnected. didnt exactly write that though.
R- Well 50% minus armor is a lot from 35%. If anything then we can make it 50% +10 minus armor reduction.

Eragm the Morl rider
Dire Intelligence
Ranged


Base stats:
Strength- 20+2
Agility- 15+3
Intelligence- 30+3

Base movment speed: 325
Base damage: 35

LORE: Machines is the only thing Morls knew. Their entire existence depended on machinery. Every waking second is spent with a machine, so anything that dare say they are better is faced with stiff resistance. Nithans were the only thing that ever dared say boo to the Morl race. So came the war. Morls battled on for weeks against the Nithans trying to prove their superiority, but facing dire times as the Nithans out did their technology through their knowledge of magic. Enter Eragm. Eragm was a young Morl, just a few days off from the scarring ceremony and saw that his people wre dying. He had enough. He built a machine that defied his people's teachings and incorperated magic into it. He called it Draken mk 1. The Draken marched unto the battlefield, making the Nithans fearful of everything that Eragm did in his machine. Soon, came the construction of the Crimson core and the Draken Slayer. The rest of the story is the same as the ancient texts, except the Draken survived, with the pilot still intact. Eragm spent decades wandering through the wasteland that now divides the land of the ancients from any other lands. While on his journey, he discovered a fragment of the Crimson core and was excited. If he could discover the secrets behind it, any machine he wanted would be created. But, he needed time and time he did not have when someone discovered him. They asked who he was and what he had. Knowing that the Nithans appearence is lost in scriptures, he simply said he was the last Nithan and what he held was the Crimson core. Soon, people were coming all over to challenge him for it. His supreme skills with machinery allowed him to beat whoever dared challenge him. He is close to unlocking the fragment's secret and the knowledge of the Nithans.

APPEARENCE:
A vehicle covered in razor sharp spines and twin turrets. Transforms into a bipedal mech with wings.

ABILITIES
Launch (Point target)
Eragm launches his vehicle into an area, making him slide and stunning any in his path.
Distance: 500/700/900/1100
Slide distance: 200/300/400/500
Stun duration: 1.5/2/2.5/3
Mana: 175
Cooldown: 20/15/10/5

Missle strike (Point target)
Damage: Physical
Pierces spell immunity: Yes
Eragm prepares his missle canisters that fire in an area, damaging heavily. He fires one missle at a time.
Missle damage: 150/160/170/180
Missles: 2/3/4/5
Damage radius: 500
Mana: 175
Cooldown: 30

Power up! (No target)
Eragm revs his engine to go faster and have additional attack speed
Movement speed increase: 50/75/100/125
Attack speed: 25/50/75/100
Mana: 150
Cooldown: 15

[ULT] DRAKEN FORM (Toggle)
Eragm transforms his vehcile into the Draken. In this form, Launch has global range, Missle strike fires all missles at once and Power up! gives flying vision. Drains mana per second and gives additional damage. Mana cost for abilities are halved.
Damage increase: 20/40/60
Mana per sec: 50/40/30

RELATIONSHIPS:
Ivan the motorhead: Hot headed and loves flames. Challenge him in the ocean.
The mole: Can avoid hazards easily by digging under them. Need to challenge him in areas where digging is impossible or has its own hazards.
Klack and Rack: Typical explosive idiots. Anything that can damper their explsive possibilities is needed.
The War Chariot: Interesting experiment that I have never seen before. Need more research on it before I can assume how to deal with it.

AUTHOR NOTE
Sorry for being so late, got bogged down with stuff...

someone could fabricate the rest of his abilities etc, but i think it would be cool if there was a hero who was like a prisoner, and he had heavy chains all over him, and his starting speed would be something like 200, and as you lvled his ultimate the chains would disappear and he would gain movement speed, until and its max he would gain max move speed, a true hard carry, with very poor early game because he cant chase or get away, but would end with permanent haste

Diposting pertama kali oleh Sir Dirge of Cykaland:

Eragm the Morl rider
Dire Intelligence
Ranged


Base stats:
Strength- 20+2
Agility- 15+3
Intelligence- 30+3

Base movment speed: 325
Base damage: 35

Q - 1600 range of leap. pretty huge for a 5 second cooldown and 3 seconds of stun.
W - is the explosions in the area random? is it 2 missile per second?
E - duration?
R - i think the mana cost should be increased. especially since it heavily buffs Launch. Launch should defintiely have a huge cooldown.

also:

Diposting pertama kali oleh Sir Dirge of Cykaland:

RELATIONSHIPS:
The War Chariot: Interesting experiment that I have never seen before. Need more research on it before I can assume how to deal with it.

damn straight.

Diposting pertama kali oleh achus93:

Diposting pertama kali oleh Sir Dirge of Cykaland:

Eragm the Morl rider
Dire Intelligence
Ranged


Base stats:
Strength- 20+2
Agility- 15+3
Intelligence- 30+3

Base movment speed: 325
Base damage: 35

Q - 1600 range of leap. pretty huge for a 5 second cooldown and 3 seconds of stun.
W - is the explosions in the area random? is it 2 missile per second?
E - duration?
R - i think the mana cost should be increased. especially since it heavily buffs Launch. Launch should defintiely have a huge cooldown.

also:

Diposting pertama kali oleh Sir Dirge of Cykaland:

RELATIONSHIPS:
The War Chariot: Interesting experiment that I have never seen before. Need more research on it before I can assume how to deal with it.

damn straight.

-20 cooldown then?
-No, the explosions affect the entire area and yes, 2 missles per sec
-10
-70/60/50

yeah, i think 20's fine.

i probably won't be doing relationships this time around. the War Chariot doesn't care about anyone else. but it's hoping that the shard can destroy him.

And... There goes the burst of creativity again!

http://gtm.steamproxy.vip/app/570/discussions/0/558748653789170248/?tscn=1425626010#c617329505865937223

Could someone critique mine? I want to see where I can improve.

Diposting pertama kali oleh insert name here:

someone could fabricate the rest of his abilities etc, but i think it would be cool if there was a hero who was like a prisoner, and he had heavy chains all over him, and his starting speed would be something like 200, and as you lvled his ultimate the chains would disappear and he would gain movement speed, until and its max he would gain max move speed, a true hard carry, with very poor early game because he cant chase or get away, but would end with permanent haste

I'll try to work something out for this Prisoner guy.

Diposting pertama kali oleh nwk.Sabrini Fur:

http://gtm.steamproxy.vip/app/570/discussions/0/558748653789170248/?tscn=1425626010#c617329505865937223

Could someone critique mine? I want to see where I can improve.

Diposting pertama kali oleh insert name here:

someone could fabricate the rest of his abilities etc, but i think it would be cool if there was a hero who was like a prisoner, and he had heavy chains all over him, and his starting speed would be something like 200, and as you lvled his ultimate the chains would disappear and he would gain movement speed, until and its max he would gain max move speed, a true hard carry, with very poor early game because he cant chase or get away, but would end with permanent haste

I'll try to work something out for this Prisoner guy.

Dude, I'm really sorry... But in this thread the way it works is... The longer you've been here the more critique you will get. I know from personal experience :) So just keep making heroes and don't hog attention cause that will make you unlikable. Ask for critique once, then let it be. Chances are, if we don't have anything to say, your hero is good
Just a friendly tip.